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  • Hey @thaddeus, since you don’t have a profile picture for Vic’s lab, why don’t I make one for you? I can make it the main character of triple orb academy or someone else. If you do want me to make one, what specifications do you want, like hairstyle, skin tone, clothing?

  • Strovist posted an update 2 weeks, 2 days ago

    @weebmetalorange it seems strange when I look back to my older chapters and realise some parts have to be changed in order to provide a clearer presentation. I guess a writer’s writing does mature the more you expand into the story.

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    • That’s good to recognize how far you come as a writer. With it, you understand your ability to improve and can use that to effectively further your writing. Even though I’m just a member like you all, it really warms my heart to see people on this site improve story by story or story by revise. It really feels like everybody here is in an…[Read more]

  • Putting aside the comments made by Shafiek, there are actually quite a couple of good things in here (Don’t worry, I have read the others parts as well).

    Although I am a little sceptical about using first-person narration, you have done quite a solid job. You have kept a fine balance in describing and expressing the narrator’s thoughts, and…[Read more]

  • Strovist posted an update 2 weeks, 2 days ago

    @weebmetalorange Hi, here’s my feedback for Overloaded chapter 1

    This is quite an interesting read. There’s quite a balanced mixture of fantasy, sci-fic and horror. Kind of reminds me of Full Metal Alchemist, although there is an intriguing touch about it that reminds me of Blood Borne. I can’t comment much given the limited number of text, but s…[Read more]

  • Strovist posted an update 2 weeks, 2 days ago

    @ice-fairy Is there going to be any updates on God Art Origins? The premise looks good.

  • Mohamed Shafiek posted an update 3 weeks ago

    Overloaded
    Story and Art by Mohamed Shafiek

    Chicago, Chicago.

    William Bastion trench crawls out of an overturned car. Shattered glass and rubble surround him. His clothing is torn up and blood trickles down over his left eye, forcing him to close it and squint with the other. His face is bruised and splotched with smeared blood.

    It’s one o…[Read more]

  • Mohamed Shafiek posted an update 1 month ago

    Alright! @sora-hana @thaddeus @byakugan-amr I finally got some free time since I’m gonna be storyboarding over the next 2 weeks. So, do any of you guys have stories you want me to review or take a look at?

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    • Do you do proof reads by chance?

      • My stories are already here on RRl, they are quite big, but you could give them a shot, they are a bit too big though (Requiem of souls 5 volumes, and the everlasting 8 volumes)

      • Sorry @thaddeus. I’m just gonna review it and tell you how I think of the story telling and other key elements are

        • Ah i see. Thanks for letting me know:) Well, i currently got nothing new accept for Triple Orb Academy. Feel free to give one chapter a shot and let me know what you think:)

  • Strovist posted an update 1 month ago

    Finally done with chapter 4!! Onwards to chapter 5!!

  • Update: My manga is going really great! Adopting an episodic format with overarching plot elements is really really fun! I love how much I can expand on the world without having to worry about touching plot threads in the process. As for Square One, I do have the 2nd and 3rd volumes already finished. I just want to space them out between each…[Read more]

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    • Dude, that’s great! I’m glad your manga is going so well. Yeah, I know that feeling too well. I feel the same exact way with my light novel. Because, I have so many intriguing ideas running around my head. And don’t worry about it, man. I understand that some novels and/or manga weren’t intended to last long. I’ve read manga like that. Plus, this…[Read more]

    • Congrats on finishing your 3 volumes. Meanwhile, i’m still stuck on my second. Now that summer break is on, i really hope to finish this second volume in preparation for the next arc.

      • Lol dude your volumes are huge compared to ours. Yoyr regular chapter has 20k words. In term of work you must have beaten us all ^^

        • I guess haha. I just felt like a word limit was enough. My intentions with volumes was for it to easily translate into 1 season of an anime adaptation er go it has 12 episodes. If it does get an adaptation (which is really big if) then it would have a nice rounded out 3 seasons.

  • Sorry for the inactivity lately from me. As @thaddeus and @javon-sankoh know, I’m also a Mangaka. Ever since I finished Square One, I feel like that story of overcoming your limitations really fueled me to go back to manga. So I’ll still be writing Square One, but I’m gonna devote more time to drawing up a new one shot.

  • Strovist posted an update 1 month, 2 weeks ago

    @sora-hana Hi, I have been going through your story again. Just out of curiosity. Did you use word document table charts for the illustrations?

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    • Yes… I did. Vic said it himself that because of that, they found it hard to convert it to kindle version XD.

  • Strovist posted an update 1 month, 3 weeks ago

    @javon-sankoh Hi Javon, here’s my feedback for twins 99 chapter 1 (revisited)

    Do note that this review is going to be short since I already know what you have in store for the story. This time, I’m just going to focus on the problems of this chapter. Yes, problems. Sorry to break the hard yoke, but this chapter has two major problems. So buckle u…[Read more]

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    • Ouch. The dialogue about Javon bringing anime up and Japanese school traditions might need to go. It feels clunky and too much of a stretch for a meta joke

      • Ah, I was just trying to type how I actually talk to my dad. I guess it doesn’t blend. Well, I’ll consider it. Especially when I think about how long my first chapter is

        • I wouldn’t worry about first chapter length. Heck, my first chapter in my manga is 50 pages long. And you know that rule about how your following chapters being generally shorter than your first? I made the second chapter 70 pages because I can. Don’t worry about chapter length. Just make sure you get all the core ideas that you wanted to get…[Read more]

    • @thaddeus. Honestly, I hate to say it, but everything you said is correct. I don’t know how I missed huge flaws such as these. I guess that’s I get for being inexperienced. I’ve only been working on this light novel. I was complete novice back then. Now, I’m just an amateur. But you know what, Strovist, thank you. I needed to see this. For a…[Read more]

      • Don’t worry. There is no shame in facing flaws and errors. This will only serve to be the foundation blocks to make you a great writer! So don’t get your hopes down! Your story has potential. Not a lot of people write about twins, and if done correctly, it can be a masterpiece in it’s own right. If you really want to improve significantly, what I…[Read more]

        • You’re right, I can only learn from this. I hope to be a great writer cause I have big plans for Twins 99. I know it could be a hit if done right. I have so much unique ideas for it. Yeah, I’ll need to start reading light novels. I’m just going to buy them. If baka tsuki has them, then sure. But recently, baka tsuki has become untrustworthy. I…[Read more]

      • In regards to your ideas for change, the part about Jovan crying can work. Again, it depends heavily on your plot as a whole. If it helps, perhaps you can refer back to your volume plot plan and see which exciting part can be interjected in the prologue. In my preference, I will always take the third or second best part and put it straight into…[Read more]

        • Actually, that’s what I was thinking too. Like you said, I have to set up the prologue in a way that grabs the reader’s attention. Ah, that’s disappointing; I thought I did well with comedy. Oh well, I’m sure I’ll figure out what jokes work and what doesn’t. I’ll gain the knowledge. Thanks, man, your advice really does help

      • To be honest, it took me a year to learn how to write.

        • It took me two years lol. I have been writing a fanfriction on Infinite Stratos, but I dropped it in the end in favour of my own story. Those were fun times, times where I had simple tastes in Anime. I used to give IS a 7/10. But after so much exposure it’s now a 5/10. Sigh… the irony.

          • Hmmm. So, it’s a process. Man, I feel like I’m late to all this. For a whole year, I thought I knew everything I needed to know after I got panned in Otakon. Even worse, I never actually read a light novel. I know, terrible. A light novelist who hasn’t read a light novel. Well, that’s definitely changing soon. My light novel is my main goal and…[Read more]

            • Well, writing stories is a process, and one that can take a long time to master. But it’s never too late to start. I spent two to four years planning my own story before I start putting it into words. I am still expanding the story as I write, and I’ll probably see no end to story expansion until the series finish. And to make things worst, I…[Read more]

  • S0rahana posted an update 1 month, 3 weeks ago

    @thaddeus Big thanks! You really made my day 😀 I actually have trouble with writing… but thanks to your encouraging words, I think I can give it another shot.

    Thanks thanks thanks 😀

  • Strovist posted an update 1 month, 3 weeks ago

    @sora-hana Hi, here’s my review on amazon uk

    https://www.amazon.co.uk/Restart-x221E-Days-Original-English-ebook/dp/B06Y54TK7B/ref=cm_rdp_product


  • Strovist posted an update 1 month, 3 weeks ago

    @sora-hana Ok, done reading. Here’s my feedback for Restart Days Vol 1

    Wow… your work is a masterpiece. I’m impressed. I have seen all sorts of sotries out there on the web, but yours truly deserve to be in the top. The quality of the content is magnificent, and the characters have all been immensely improved upon. I will go as far to say tha…[Read more]

  • Strovist posted an update 1 month, 3 weeks ago

    @sora-hana Congrats on the formal publication! Restart Days is now on my kindle. Will give you a review soon:)

  • OH YEAH!! @sora-hana @thaddeus @byakugan-amr @javon-sankoh It’s finally ready for preorder! This is actually really cool! I hope you all pick up a copy. You can grab it as a digital book or a physical printed copy. Want one? Grab it here:…[Read more]

    OH YEAH!! @sora-hana @thaddeus @byakugan-amr @javon-sankoh It’s finally ready for preorder! Th
  • Strovist posted an update 1 month, 4 weeks ago

    Finally done with 2nd and 3rd chapter of my second volume!!! (Beta version). And yet, I’m still no where near the arc’s completion. I may seriously need to split off the arc into separate volumes. Oh well, I guess I have to keep writing and see how things go:)

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    • Kudos! I’ve had the second volume of Square One already finished like 2 weeks ago. I put it on the back burner since I don’t want to release them literally right after each other. I’m thinking 2 months in between each. Also, I have a good method for story arcs. I’m making an episodic manga about nanobots and I’m trying to keep at least 1 and a…[Read more]

      • Wow… you are fast! Are you sure you are not some hidden disciple of Kazuma Kamachi?! I really feel so slow… sobs…

        • I’ve kind of disciplined myself ever since my freshman year of college. I didn’t remember, but I did watch Bakuman during that year and their determination (Although exaggerated because of anime) kind of made me determined. Since then, I’ve been working on drawing and writing speed, hoping to become part of shonen jump. Even though now I know…[Read more]

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